If I had a time machine I would go to the past to see what it looked like. I would like to know what life was like and where my house was. Also, I would want to meet Suryavarman II to ask how Angkor Wat was built.. After I want to meet my great great grandmother to know how her life are and tell her who I am.
After I go to the past I want to go to the future and look how the world are and how the different between the past and the future and I want to know about my family life and I want to ask my family how the life are and I want to tell my family about myself. After I meet my family I want to see lot of new invention like Car, Computer, Electric Equipment and lots of many things in the world.
When I come back from the future I will show the people how the world are great and how our grandchild life and I want to make the world update like the future. This is the end of my story Thank.
Hi, Chorpoan!
ReplyDeleteYou have some clever ideas here so,well done. I'd like to see you use shorter sentences and perhaps slow down when you write.
Have a look at this *If I had a time machine, I would go to the past and look how the past look like and to know how the life in the past are, I want to know where my house and how my house look like and the important person I want to meet is Suryavarman II to ask how Angkor Wat was build.*
This is very long.
Better would be * If I had a time machine I would go to the past to see what it looked like. I would like to know what life was like and where my house was.
(new paragraph)
Also, I would want to meet Suryavarman II to ask how Angkor Wat was built.*
Thank, Teacher i will make my story more better. Chorpoan
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